What a mess!
From The Broker by John Grisham
The use of a short exclamation emphasizes shortly and simply a mess.
My Sentence:
It's a kill!
Monday, October 12, 2009
Sentence a Day #6
His Sentence:
The use of an appositive phrase separated with dashes brings out the phrase emphasizing the country inn.
My Sentence:
The deer flinched in pain--the arrow gliding through the lungs and heart--and the hunter relaxed after a great shot.
Sentence a Day #5
His Sentence:
Some documents-doctored but still classified-were smuggled out by a Hubbard mole who was reporting everything to his superiors.
From The Broker by John Grisham.
The use of dashes to bring out the appositive phrase by the unusual syntax.
My Sentence:
The weapon of choice- a compound bow with razor sharp broad heads-was about to reach its full potential.
Sentence a Day #4
His Sentence:
He listened to it from time to time, understood not a single word, and worked hard to convince himself that he could master the language.
From The Broker by John Grisham.
He uses an appositive phrase to emphasize the attitude the character has towards the language he is learning.
My sentence:
The hunter sat still, not moving a single muscle, eager to draw down on the beast that expected nothing.
Sentence a Day #3
His Sentence:
Joel soaked in the quaint little shops--the tabaccheria with racks of newspapers blocking the door, the farmacia with its neon green cross, the butcher with all manner of hams hanging in he window, and of course the tiny sidewalk cafes where all tables were taken with people who appeared content to sit and read and gossip and sip espresso for hours.
From The Broker by John Grisham.
His use of epistrophe in the repetition of the clauses emphasises Joel's frustration of being locked up for 6 years and noting all of the "normal" people living "normal" lives.
My sentence:
The couple would like the appliances, and the furniture, and the telivision, and the oven, and the fridge, and most of all, a low price.
Sentence a Day #2
His Sentence:
He couldn't blame her. It was his fault. Everything.
From The Broker by John Grisham.
The short choppy sentences reflect frustration and even anger in the character's voice.
My Sentence:
The pain was excruciating. Piercing. Far greater than expected.
Friday, September 25, 2009
Sentence a Day Sentence #1
His Sentence:
Inside the room, a large, square, windowless place known unofficially as the bunker, the Director was sitting alone, looking blankly at a large screen upon which the face of Congressman Aaron Lake was frozen.
from The Brethren by John Grisham.
A longer sentence using parallel structure and shorter appositive phrases to emulate the Director's loneliness and seclusion in his determination in looking at his suspect.
My Sentence:
At the ballpark, a diamond shaped, brightly lit, enormous stadium with an atmosphere of entertainment, the baseball players fought for 2 hours through nine grueling innings with the purpose of beating the other team by scoring as many runs as possible.
Inside the room, a large, square, windowless place known unofficially as the bunker, the Director was sitting alone, looking blankly at a large screen upon which the face of Congressman Aaron Lake was frozen.
from The Brethren by John Grisham.
A longer sentence using parallel structure and shorter appositive phrases to emulate the Director's loneliness and seclusion in his determination in looking at his suspect.
My Sentence:
At the ballpark, a diamond shaped, brightly lit, enormous stadium with an atmosphere of entertainment, the baseball players fought for 2 hours through nine grueling innings with the purpose of beating the other team by scoring as many runs as possible.
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